Double digits – by Estrella Azul

It was her. The woman he has longed for ever since they have met some months ago. The woman whom he could never truly have.

He watched her for a long time, not quite knowing how to ask what was on his mind. He decided to go with straight forward and inquired.

- So… How many boyfriends have you had?

- Many. – she answered nonchalantly.

- Is that a precise number? – he winked.

She smiled at him.

- Sure.

- So a lot, huh?

- Yes.

They lay there for minutes, cuddled up. He caressed her back, fondled her shoulder-length hair as she distanced herself slightly from his embrace.

- Is it like… double digits? – he proceeded carefully.

- Yes.

- Higher than ten?

- Yes.

- Higher than fifteen?

- Yes.

- Higher than seventeen?

She paused to look at him seriously. Then slid off of the bed and picked her clothes up from around the room’s hardwood floor.

- What are you fishing for?

- I’m not sure.

- Why? Does it matter how many boyfriends I’ve had? How many men I’ve slept with? What are you really trying to ask?

- No, it doesn’t matter. I don’t know why I asked. – he answered sincerely – Never mind.

With all her clothes gathered up she headed towards the bathroom, then changed her mind. She lowered the pile onto an armchair and asked.

- Want to join me for a shower?

- Sure.

Just a one-night stand, a rebound thing… – he thought.

No, somehow it didn’t matter.

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14 Responses to “Double digits – by Estrella Azul”

  1. Ah, my curiosity has been satisfied. Now I know what the double digits refers to. :~)

    Wonderful piece of colored glass from what feels like it might be a kaleidoscope being shaken. . . .

  2. Excellent short Estrella..you managed to nail the fragile, insecurity of the male ego in a few carefully crafted sentences. Love the use of “somehow.” in the last line. Are we really are that shallow? The answer is ..probably yes. har har

  3. Nice. If someone brings something up, it does matter. Even if they say it doesn’t.

  4. Sounds like he is reluctant to accept that she is “The woman whom he could never truly have.” It’s going to hurt when that finally sinks in.

  5. Wow, nicely done… and I’m glad he shut it in the nick of time! LOL

    Being FARfetched again since WP insists I log in…

  6. I really liked this Estrella, the dialogue was just perfect.

  7. Silly guy doesn’t seem to know when he’s well off. And there are some things that you just don’t ask a lady. :)

  8. Estrella, I just left a comment so don’t know if I deleted it or it’s waiting approval. You did a great job with the dialogue here. That is so hard for me. I think the second and third sentences can be tightened slightly (drop any word you really don’t need) but very nice work.

  9. There’s a great big smile on my face having read this. The dialogue flowed so well.

    She’s so grounded and he…he’s cursed with this need to over think, and worse. I’d love to know more about these two – probably more about her than him, truth to tell I suspect.

    Nice writing, Estrella.

  10. Very realistic…and I wonder if he’s going to try and make her “his” anyway. :-)

  11. Oh wow, thank you everyone for taking the time to post your lovely comments! I’m so glad you all enjoyed this flash, especially as I woke up in the middle of the night to scribble most of it down.

    I’m sorry I didn’t have the time to respond to each of you individually, but I’ll be dropping my your blogs in the following days and leaving comments on your flashes and posts!

    Happy Easter :)

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